Reviews For Sayōnara, Akio (さようならアキオ)
Name: Mairead (Signed) · Date: 26/04/13 - 07:18 am · For: Part 7: The Room of Dirt
wait...blondie? naruto ? huh? the blood prison movie?
Author's Response: This is a FAN-fiction. Let my imaginary juices flow and ur gunna love it. ... In any case yea, I used the blood prison as a reference, cuz it suits the story the best
Name: Mairead (Anonymous) · Date: 10/12/12 - 08:27 pm · For: Part 1: Meeting Akio
Great plot. Hope to see you update soon and please don't desert this story =)
Author's Response: Haha I won't! Thank you! :DD
Name: Konan (Signed) · Date: 05/11/12 - 07:05 pm · For: Part 3: Life was sweet, but then
Aww... I feel like something tragic is coming up very soon. I feel bad for Matsu... She seems very insecure and lonely, even with Akio. :(
Now.. for (somewhat) criticism...
The beginning was kind of slow and hard to get into...
The dialogue seemed rushed in the beginning but in this latest chapter, It was better. It flowed okay.
-_-' Haha, I'm not good at criticizing.
Aha' I don't have much free time so I like that your chapters are simple and short. Good work. :)
Author's Response: Awaa thank you so much! ;_; Yeah I know I rushed in first few chapters, I'm sorry about that! >_< I just got into it an I yeah, I kinda ruined since I'm fast on ideas but I'm not patient enough for writing eheh ^^; But I'm so glad you like the story! Btw I don't wanna spoil you anything so be a lil' patient for next chapter (gotta find some time to write it down), it's gonna be heavy one Thank you for your honest critics, I take them very well as a references to how to write better :)
Name: Chihiro Blossom (Signed) · Date: 25/10/12 - 01:51 pm · For: Part 1: Meeting Akio
Hm...... To tell the truth, the entire start seemed like a...... I believed its called an info dump? I'm not sure. But you kinda just tell us who your character is rather than letting us find out ourselves, and there are many mistakes, which takes away from the story to me.
It was really interesting, though. Haha. Matsu, that would be soooo easy to misunderstand. I wonder how Akio will react to this sudden reaction. It's a really cute friendship and I would hate to see it die. Oh, and how old are they?
Just because this has been bugging me to death, you need to add/fix the at the end of your summary because now basically the entire most recent page is bold, so yeah......
Author's Response: Ehh I'm sorry for mistakes and bold thingies and all ^^; (I'm not a native speaker of English) I'm still an amateur at improving stage hehe Thank you for reviewing! I'll fix everything (damn), and yeah, Akio should be around 13 - 14 years old now rofl so that makes Matsu about like 9 - 10??