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Reviews For Three Days

Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 21/04/12 - 06:59 am · For: Epilogue
u never cease to impress me...

Author's Response: Thank you...? This is a very short review for you, I don't know how else to respond :P


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 15/04/12 - 06:07 pm · For: Epilogue
Hm..... You're grandma seems like mine. My grandma's sister died, and I saw my dad cry more than she did. It seems like the older they are, the easier it is for them it it to accept it since they've known them for so long.

It's really sad to read all of your all's reaction. It almost brought me to tears just reading about theirs. I hate that your family had to go through this, but I smiled like crazy when I saw that they were getting along like they were. It was just so touching!

I loved your chat with Ayumu. He was right about you being strong, Silverwolf. You truly were being strong, especially considering the situation. I'm very proud of you Silverwolf, whether or not that means anything.

Gah, how did I forget about this! Sheesh, what's wrong with me. You've deserved this for a long time:



This was a beautiful peace, Silverwolf. And I just feel the need to say this: God bless you and your family, Silverwolf, and may He keep all of you safe.

Author's Response: I like your reason as to why older people cry less more than I liked my reason. My logic was that since they live to be elderly, they expect it more often than any of us do. They're older, so maybe they expect their close ones to begin withering away sooner than we all hope.

Almost brought you to tears. Oh good, you didn't cry in this one. This story made you cry so much that I was worried you were going to dry your tear ducts out. Yes, the family is getting along now. Not perfect, but the relationships are much better than they have been, I guess you could say.

I don't have that many deep conversations with my family members, so having a discussion like that with my grandmother's brother was really memorable for me. Ah, I can't see the picture! :( Mah, it's okay, I know what it looks like anyway :) Thank you for the award. And thank you for the prayer, my family and I appreciate your concern always.


Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 13/04/12 - 01:13 pm · For: Epilogue
What an amazing ending to an amazing short story. Honestly it was incredible. I really can't find the correct words to describe it besides amazing. Good work wolf-chan :)

Author's Response: Despite the whole depressing nature of this story, there's a big cheesy grin on my face because of this review. I'm glad you liked the ending. Thanks for sticking with this all the way, Shizake-san! You're awesome!


Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 13/04/12 - 10:30 am · For: Prologue
t.t damn. My stomach is froze with that feeling you get right before you get into an accident or those falling dreams.

I had typed out my own personal experiences but thought otherwise. I think people are emotional enough as it is with your story. I'll just settle with the lump in my throat =]

I just want to mention that when you watch a loved one go through that the meaning of "Rest in Peace" becomes a lot clearer.

Author's Response: Um... I don't know if that's a good thing that this chapter made you feel like that... I'll just say thank you :) But I'm sorry I left a lump in your throat. As for that last part, I completely agree. "Rest in Peace", it embodies a lot of different meanings based on the person. Thank you for reading and reviewing, I appreciate it!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 12/04/12 - 01:26 pm · For: The Third Day
Not trying to make you feel bad, but I was banging against my head since I know this is stuff you actually felt. I know this is stuff you felt in the past, but I hated reading your pain because it made me feel like I was sitting back and watching you just go through this.

It was a great, emotional chapter that had me crying right along with Takako (you). I actually have imagined someone in my family dying, and just thinking of it makes me cry. I can't imagine what it is you had to go through. I'm glad that you're getting all of this out and that it's helping you. Letting things out hurt to begin with, but that pain fades. The pain of keeping it locked in continues until the person finally breaks.

Sorry, went into story mode there for a second. It was a really good chapter. It was beautifully written, and I love your speech to your grandpa. It was even more beautiful than your writing, which I otherwise wouldn't have believed possible.

I know the epilogue will be up soon, and I hope that with it you'll get out all the things you need to. And if not, you know where FFW is. Sheesh, have you gotten tired of me reminding you of that yet?

Author's Response: No, I didn't want you to feel like you were watching and doing nothing. There wasn't anything you could have done except comfort me at the time, and you did when I brought it up. That's all I needed.

Oh, I'm sorry I made you cry, Sasaui. I didn't want you to feel so bad. And if you are worried about me, please don't worry. I am much better, and if I wasn't, I don't think I would have been able to write about this. I'm glad this chapter was written well though, at least I know I did that right :)

Sasaui, I never get tired of you telling me I have a place where I can talk. That makes it even more welcoming :) Thank you very much for the support and everything. You're awesome for being so supportive.


Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 10/04/12 - 08:47 pm · For: Prologue
If you do creative writing classes they'll likely mention it also

Author's Response: If I take those classes... We'll see if they fit into my schedule next year... *sigh*


Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 10/04/12 - 08:46 pm · For: Prologue
Haha yeah. It woulda been terrible ;]

I'm not trying to be nice. The points I made are legit. I didn't coin the term "Info Dump" either. It's a sin among authors though. They talk a lot about it in those podcasts I linked you. Or you could just google if you are interested. nite

Author's Response: Awful, just awful! Well okay, whatever you say, I guess I'm just not used to such great compliments from you :) Okay, now I definitely need to look into those podcasts. Thanks!


Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 10/04/12 - 06:57 pm · For: Prologue
I probably should just respond in email but w/e. 30 reviews looks so much better than 29. 29 is an ugly number ;D

I'm doing good. I've moved around a bit, landed myself a roommate, and finally am making some money. Naturally I had spend some to get a console to get that new Naruto game :D

I completely understand your concern about me basing my comment of you improving by what I read previously, but I don't just mean improvement in terms of writing ability. The choice you made to write this type of story in first person was absolutely spot on. The first person narrative lets you experience and share emotions like no other, but there are reasons why the style isn't popular. It has its nuances. If I continued I'd just be parroting authors words and I feel like a prick preaching so I'll stop. Point is, it was the correct way to go and a smart choice.

I'll be honest, (oh god my internet curse) I've scan read a couple of your most recently updated stories, and I just can't say I enjoy you juggling around so many OC's -- especially after seeing how well you do focusing solely on one character like this. That's what lead me to see the potential you have. People can put faces on people in the Three Days story, and using the original characters from Naruto can save authors from having to flesh out new ones.

*rant mode engaged, this is not directed at you* Most OC fic's that involve a lot of new characters and sadly even a single OC end up with "Info dumps" that sour the fic immediately. They throw the information at you assuming that if you know their features, quirks, and past that you'll immediately share the connection with the character as you do with the ones in the Manga.

For example, try to imagine the average writer on TONFA creating a character like Lee in their fic. I would be awe-struck if they could portray the hardships he's gone through, the importance of his ninja way, and his extreme determination. This is more of a problem with OC's similar to Sasuke and Gaara. You either get an info dump or some generic background tale that is supposed to suffice to the reader. *end rant*

Now that rant came to mind because in Three Days you don't get a OC with a character dump. You did it right. You displayed the circumstances surrounding the character and took the reader on a ride. You showed how upset your character was; the scene where you showed your character repeatedly cried, cried, and cried would normally be handed on the "I cried harder than I ever had before. I had never felt so horrible." platter. But you struck it repeatedly into the readers head and made them realize the seriousness. It was real. Hell you could have done this in third person limited to. It's small differences like in that scene which can accurately portray the seriousness of the situation. When it is done in a fake manner it comes out as cheesy, but since the reader knew the circumstances at that point, knew what the character was going through, it had an impact. Good grammar and good ideas don't make a story. You have to sell it; make it real. I was afraid it would be over-dramatized as people tend to do with these types of scenes but it was legit.

You've got some jinchuuriki power level writing skills hidden inside you, but for future stories be sure you don't jump the gun and try to shove readers onto a emotional rollercoaster before you build up to a climax. It's almost like its own skillset to be able to deliver these scenes correctly, as the hardest part is keeping a good pace throughout the "normal" parts of the story. People seem to be in a hurry to reach these types of climaxes so it has no effect when it hits; they want their "OMG WOW MY DREAM SCENARIO LETS JUMP TO IT" It's hard work and fanfic writers are usually lazy about it.

I think your idea for this as a general fiction piece would be great.

Author's Response: I agree, it is a very strange-looking number. Thank you for making it even :D Oh, glad to hear you're doing alright! Got a job and a new roommate? That's good to hear. Oh, if you didn't get the new Naruto game, it'd probably be a very sad thing to hear ;D

This part of your response made me very happy. I have seen my improvement in writing throughout this story, but hearing all your compliments honestly make me feel a lot better too. The first narrative was admittedly both comfortable and uncomfortable for me. It was a nice way to write it because it was through my eyes and I could pour everything into a first person POV. But I know what nuisances you're referring to, so we don't need to get into that ;) But I'm especially happy to hear that the first narrative was a good choice and even came out so well.

Okay, well, at least I know that you actually did read some of my more recent stuff. Thank you for bothering :) I do think I need to practice with writing more OCs at a time because, let's be honest, if I ever write a novel or something, I'm going to have to manage every character I bother to create. So I consider this practice. And thanks to this honest remark, I now know I need to better myself in that area :D

An "Info dump"... Did you make that up? Or is that an actual thing? But anyway, that is a really interesting way to put it, and your perspective is now making me think a little...

Oh wow, Three Days was just a short venting session of an occurrence in my life, so to hear that you think I wrote it so well is... I don't know... Confidence-boosting? Yeah, let's go with that. I feel like you're being too nice, but the logical part of my brain is finally noticing all the stuff you're pointing out, such as the repeated "I cried, and I cried, and I cried," and it is telling me that I should incorporate this style into my other works. You're right about it being real, so now I need to keep everything I write real. Thank you for explaining this to me. You definitely have a very interesting perspective that is also really helpful. Thank you for the awesome compliments, nkbz, they really helped.


Name: nkbz (Signed) · Date: 10/04/12 - 04:45 pm · For: The Second Day
Hey I know I haven't been around as much lately but I check in every once in awhile (I don't review often anymore because sadly I don't feel like people take criticism.) I've read the whole thing and the passion you put into it was really evident. It's probably the most mature subject I've seen you write about and probably the best. I've had all four of my grandparents pass, and because I think many can relate to the subject it easily draws out the emotion.

I believe that should this have been a scene in a well fleshed out fanfiction and you were you were able to invoke the same emotions in the characters you created instead of driving off of the readers experiences it would be novel quality. It really goes to show how much potential you have.

I'm not going to nitpick any spelling mistakes as I know by now it somehow seems to be easily overlooked by writers when they become absorbed in their own work. Probably why editors are life savers among authors ^_^

It's really great stuff Wolfy, but as you probably are aware this type of "genre" won't be fully appreciated or understood due to the average age of the writers and readers on the site.

On an unrelated note my friend introduced me to website called writingexcuses.com where four successful authors do 15 minute podcasts discussing writing techniques and more. It's a great site to check out if you are looking to improve and hear insight from people who have been able to make a living off of writing. One of the recent podcasts was about "Writing the Omniscient viewpoint" which I remembered us discussing for awhile. You can check it out here (Just click on the Audio MP3 icon or right-click and save as):

writingexcuses.com/2012/03/18/writing-excuses-7-12-writing-the-omniscient-viewpoint

They even discuss Mary-Sue's in one of them ^_^

Author's Response: Well, look who it is! Yeah, haven't seen you in a while. How have you been?

Wow, this is probably the nicest review you've ever given me. I'm all flustered now. This is my first piece of writing I've ever created through first person POV, so I think that might have something to do with why it seems so much better than what I have written in the past. I'm sorry to hear that you've lost all four of your grandparents. You know what this feels like then. I"m sorry for your losses.

This whole story was written in the span of a month while my other stories take nearly months to update. So this writing style incorporates my more recently developed skills. I think my other pieces of writing that you've read were still in the beginner stages, so I'm personally sad to know that you're basing my improvement off my more immature stuff :P But I did see myself improve when it came to writing emotions and more mature subjects, so I do thank you for noticing this. And thanks even more for the compliment on my potential, that's even more flattering.

Oh jeez, I'm a terrible proofreader, I'll be the first to admit that. I need an editor sometimes, but I think I'm too impatient to actually wait for one to do the work for me.

Thank you for the lovely compliments, nkbz. Oh, I know that this type of story won't catch people's eyes. But at least I know that for those who did read it, they were touched by it. I think I'm going to un-Narutofy this and post it on a more general fiction site as well.

Hmm, it sounds like a really interesting site. I think it'd be really helpful to me, thank you so much for leaving the link!

Thanks again for reading and reviewing this. Feedback such as yours is always much appreciated.


Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 10/04/12 - 12:25 pm · For: The Third Day
now for thee review bout the writing...
m sorry... =( just didn't feel like putting this review along the earlier one...
hope u don't mind...
so... well the chapter was as amazing as ever... no doubt in that... with mistakes, typos or anything... =)
you've improved uruphoo...
i tend to forget ur writing it in a narotoverse way... (didn't get a better word) the mention of chunin reminded me of it...
ah... i m guessing that Hiroshi is the incarnation of a guy at the pool u have a thing for... blunt! xP
i can imagine u blushing in front of the screen right now...
sorry ;o tryin to lighten up the mood here...
eh... snot... .___.
when i read that word... i thought it was something like it fell on emi's clothes or somethin... x____x
i was like, u don't have to be that detailed...!!!!! then i read the next part and was like oh...
"future husband" i know it isn't for sure... but still idk why i keep gettin a thought that it was typed to lighten the readers mood...but u cried while writing that i know... D= but some stupid part of my brain thinks that is supposed to b funny...

sorry... ii don't mean to ruin the seriousness of this fic... its amazing...
but its just an attempt to cheer u up...
i could't think of it after reading this chapter...i waited for an hour for to mind to get settled or so... till i could type any of the above...
no offense meant in any of the above sentences...
well... as i usually tell my all-time favourite author...
Awesome work at another job(chapter) well done...
and this is just me being me...
when's da next update...? =D
night night... or morning... w/e =P

Author's Response: Haha, that's alright. Two reviews for two different subjects, that's understandable.

Wait, are you saying there were no mistakes? Oh, I don't believe that. I'm going to go reread it now to check :P But thanks for the compliment on my improvement, I appreciate that :)

Actually... I'm not blushing. I'm laughing. I figured you would be the one to bring up Hiroshi. No, I don't have a thing for him, nor did I ever have a thing for him. He's just the best-looking guy on staff, but that's besides the point. He was just a friend at the time, and he did happen to be there during both times I was called away from work.

Well, with a word like 'snot', would you rather me write 'boogies'? And yeah, you're right about how I cried while writing that part. It wasn't meant to be funny or to lighten anyone's mood. That is the exact speech I said to my grandfather, so it isn't meant to be humorous.

I know you didn't mean any harm by it. And your reviews were overall very thoughtful. So thank you for reading and reviewing this chapter. And an update? Well, I actually finished the epilogue to this :D I'll post it this weekend.


Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 10/04/12 - 11:35 am · For: The Third Day
.....
its roughly around 11:40 while i read this...
idk wat to say really... i mean... the whole chapter was sad and all... yeah...
but...
the fact that the person who went through all this... is a rclose friend... someone whom i look up to... went through all this pain... depression...
and to top that up... while she went through all this... i spoke with her not knowing a thing... it feels so... ... idk
wow goosebumps .___.
my deepest heartfelt condolences to all of your family uruphoo...

Author's Response: Wow... This review really touched me... It was very sweet, Shadow. Thank you. Thank you for the sympathy and condolences and everything.


Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 09/04/12 - 02:20 pm · For: The Third Day
I keep thinking how I would feel in this kind of a situation, and I don't think i'd be able to bear the pain. Death is a part of life, but is it selfish that I don't want to let anyone i love experience it? Yeah, but we've all got to go, and that's that....................
Awesome, thoughtful, heart wrenching story wolf-nee. ^^

Author's Response: It isn't selfish, it's natural to hope that no one ever goes through something like this. It is something we have to deal with, but I think everyone can agree they'd want it to happen later rather than sooner. Thank you for the compliment on the story. I hope you stay tuned for the upcoming epilogue. Thanks for reading and review, Rose-chan.


Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 09/04/12 - 08:29 am · For: The Third Day
Well I'm sitting here at school depressed. I'm not sure why I'm not crying, though it takes a lot to make me cry. All I can say is that my heart aches after reading this. It was beautifully written. An amazing story filled with such sorrow. Don't think I'll be cheerful the rest of the day, but that's what I get for reading at school. I can tell that your grandfather was a great person. May his soul rest in peace. Incredible story wolf-chan. Incredible.

Author's Response: Gah, why would you read this at school?! I didn't want you to be so sad during the day, now the rest of your day is going to seem terrible :( Well, at least you're not crying, that might be a little difficult to explain if your friends or teacher saw you.... But I guess I am happy that I was able to make you so upset, it means my writing really did improve in creating depressing atmospheres. Thank you for the sympathy, and I'm glad you liked this. Thanks for reading and reviewing, and I hope the rest of your day isn't too saddening after reading this.


Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 08/04/12 - 11:05 pm · For: Prologue
same here... :/
my network is being messy...=(
and it might be a few days till i can load it...
i can only use mobile internet till than .___.
hv u guys started on the collab again...?

Author's Response: Aww, I'm sorry your network is messed up. I know what that's like, it's terrible :( I hope it gets better soon. Oh yeah, we did start talking about it again, but I don't know what we decided on yet :P


Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 04/04/12 - 11:00 pm · For: Prologue
something i forgot to say - I found it more painful when the nurse gave you hope. Giving false hope....

Ah, and cuz I can't think of any other way to do this, i just wanted to tell you guys and every1 else on FFW that I can't access the site cause of something, so not for a few days.....

Update soon!

Author's Response: Since you're technically not supposed to know that the grandfather does die, the hope is supposed to make everyone feel better. In the end, it really is just false hope though. Aww, I'm sorry, Rose-chan! I was wondering where you were! :( I hope whatever the issue is gets fixed soon. Anyway, thanks for reading and reviewing, you're amazing!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 04/04/12 - 07:12 pm · For: The Second Day
Well, I wrote most of this once, then I accidentally X-ed out of the page, so let's see if I can do it this time.

There were two parts that had in tears (not much, but a few of tears). The first one, the one that brought less tears, was when Maiko and Takako hugged. That part was just so sweet and a nice contrast to how the adults later on would act. The other part was when the nurse said that their grandpa's condition was improving. Seeing as I know the outcome, that just down right ripped out my heart. I can't imagine what must have been going through you mind when I wrote that part.

I'm really starting to like your mom. I don't know why, but that fighting spirit is something I've always liked in people. Unless, of course, it's being used against me, which just makes us clash...... I also really like the way you and your cousins acted while the adults all fought. That showed your strength as a family where the adults failed. I mean, seeing as they already clashed before they all grew up, I can see why they would act that way. But I still say way to go for you grandchildren. I'm sorry about the trouble with your family and I hope that they can work it out eventually. It's sad when a family is broken up. There's something that I can understand. Though recently we've gotten back into contact with them.

I'm sorry about all the trouble you went through back then. I'm glad that we've been there for you, even if we've never really addressed this subject to do a counseling session or anything. But still, you've had friends there for you. Just keep in mind we're always there. Sheesh, I think I'm going to say that in every review I give you.

Author's Response: That happens to me too, and it usually happens when I write long reviews :P Aww, the sisterly moment made you cry?... Really? Looking back on it, I realize that we don't share too many memorable moments, so I guess it is rather sweet :) The scene with the nurse... Yeah, a part of me regrets listening to her because it did make things so much harder for the third day... Haha, I'd tell my mom that you like her personality, but she'd probably freak out a little bit :P She does have a lot of fighting spirit though, but she only shows it in situations like this. I think the fact that our cousins still accept us is one of the few reasons why I don't get as frustrated with the family feuding. I'm sorry you have to experience some obstacles in your family relationship, but I'm glad to hear that you're now keeping in contact with them. Thank you for the sympathy, Sasaui, but after writing this story, I don't know if I really need a counseling session. Writing it all as it happened really helps :) But if I ever need to talk, I know where to find you guys ;) Thanks for the review, Sasaui, you're amazing!


Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 04/04/12 - 08:07 am · For: The Second Day
Ah...... .___.
idk what to say..
Well, almost every family has this kinda crap dosent it.. :/
So... no comment on that..
And i can understand what u mean by outcast in relatives. i'l explain on Sasu's site :P
as for the part with maiko was so sweet =D
the two sisters together.. ^_^
Demon-fox and uruphoo-chan =]
Times like this make me wish i had a sibling... >_<
anyways...
Awesome chapter uruphoo... =D
just caught a few mistakes..here =)
"We were always fighting anymore"
"I hadnr17;t seen so thrilled since before this whole fiasco began."

Kool job at this chappie uruphoo...
I'm glad didnt have to see another of takako's breakdowns >_

Author's Response: I suppose that is true, though I'm sure everyone feels like they're alone in that respect. And being outcast just makes it much worse. Yeah, that was one of the few memorable moments where Demon Fox and I actually shared a sisterly moment. Ah, so you did catch some mistakes, thank you for laying them out for me, that is very helpful. The first one though was meant to be worded that way. It may not be grammatically correct, but that is what was going through my mind, so I think I'll leave it like that... The second one though must be changed immediately! Thanks for the review as always, Shadow! You're awesome!


Name: xkazumix (Signed) · Date: 04/04/12 - 05:34 am · For: The Second Day
I sure hope they get along!! Yet again a wonderful chapter you written. Keep up a good work =]

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you are enjoying this so far, I enjoy receiving such kind reviews. Thanks again for reading and reviewing!


Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 03/04/12 - 09:51 pm · For: The Second Day
It's a pretty hopeful chapter, especially the end. I quite liked it. I do hope they learn to get along. I can understand family disputes; it's sad how some things create barriers among people who should be close. Looking forward to the next chapter wolf-nee! ^^

Author's Response: Yeah, I think this is the only chapter that doesn't have a huge amount of depression in it. I think I'll be showing if the adults can get along in the epilogue, so you shall just have to wait and see ;) Family disputes are just awful, and as someone who experienced them all my life, all I can say, to put it simply, is that they suck. Anyway, I'm glad you liked this chapter. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Rose-chan, you're incredible!


Name: Shizake Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 03/04/12 - 07:08 pm · For: The Second Day
You do really great with going from sorrow to high tension, This was great. I was already in a depressed mood and now i'm even more depressed. Don't worry it's not a bad thing I really did enjoy this. Keep up the incredible work.

Author's Response: Thanks... I guess? I mean, I know it's a compliment and all, but since this is based on true events, I wonder just how much credit I can take for writing from depressing to tense. And you already depressed? Then why on earth would you read this now?! Now I feel really bad, I'm sorry :( I hope you feel better. Thanks for reading and reviewing as always, Shizake-san! You're awesome!


Name: xkazumix (Signed) · Date: 31/03/12 - 01:57 pm · For: The First Day
Another chapter! I was surprised actually. Good job on this chapter. I will be waiting for more to read. I got really attached to it.

Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad you are still keeping up with this story! I'm happy you thought it was good. I hope you continue to enjoy this. Thanks for reading and reviewing!


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 27/03/12 - 01:47 pm · For: The First Day
The prologue had my eyes watery. This chapter had me in tears. If this is like what happened, Silverwolf, I'm truly proud of you for the last part. You did a lot for your cousins and sister, even if you don't realize it, for saying what they couldn't. It's just slight comfort, but at least they knew he'd heard the words they couldn't say. And don't ever hold back tears. Holding them back may make you seem stronger, but the emotions being held back tear a person up from the inside out. Which brings me back to reminding you that the ones on FFW are always there for you. Don't forget our promise to each other, Silverwolf. I know this is in the past, but if the wound ever reopens or something else happens, we're there. And I'm starting to wonder if this fanfiction is good for you. It let's you release things you have kept buried and just allows you to get it out.

Is it just me, or do I seem older than 15 in both my reviews for this.......?

Author's Response: Did it really? I'm so sorry I made you cry, Sasaui :( Everything I'm writing for this did really happen, it's all based on the true events of those days. At the time, I didn't realize that I was speaking for my family; I mean, I guess I knew it, but I obviously wasn't really concerned with that at the time. They even told me later that they sobbed more when I started talking. Oh, I cried a lot during those three days; it all started when I was at work and my assistant manager told me. I sobbed in front of everyone. After that, I don't really remember precisely when I cried, I just know that my face was stained with tears a lot of the time. But I would never forget my promise to you, Sasaui; you're one of the first friends I ever made on the Internet. I can trust you with anything :)

Haha, you really are very mature for your age, Sasaui. That's a good thing, whether you realize it or not. Anyway, thanks for the review and the great support you always show me. I appreciate both very much.


Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 26/03/12 - 09:49 pm · For: Prologue
I've never been particularly close to any of my grandparents. but loss is not so foreign to me. This was very deep, I like the interpretation of real life through fictional characters.

This was an overall good, yet saddening story. I'd say it thoroughly depressed me, but I've never been in this situation. The lost one isn't dead yet, you had a warning. I don't know, but I think that would make it harder. I'd feel so artificial, so timed. Someone was about to die,but I couldn't do anything. It truly sounds like an dreadful feeling.

This was a great work, Gin-cha. I hope to read the next bit soon.

Author's Response: Hmm, I'm sorry to hear that you've experienced loss before. It's not the greatest feeling in the world, I'm sure you know. At least my writing was good in this, that was one of the goals for this story. You're right in saying that having a warning is harder than just having it happen. In the back of the mind, there's that fluttering hope that the person you care for will get better, but you're still watching his body wither away. I'm glad you liked the writing in this, thank you for the review!


Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 26/03/12 - 01:33 pm · For: The First Day
wolf-nee~
You're supposed to be happy it made me sad! That means you wrote it so well!
Or maybe not happy per se...
I don't know....
You're an awesome writer!

Author's Response: Yeah, but.... I still feel bad that you were upset.... I mean, I'm glad it means I wrote it well, that's an awesome compliment. This is just the price of posting this story: it makes people so sad. And I don't like making people depressed. It's a weird mixture of emotions, I guess. But okay, I'm glad you think I'm an awesome writer! Thank you! :D


Name: shadow9000 (Signed) · Date: 26/03/12 - 01:18 am · For: The First Day
"I contemplated setting the kitchen on fire to evacuate the place." uh... did u really think of doing something like that at the pool? O_O'
well.. that was just an attempt at humor... >_<
if the last chapter was haert-breaking...
This one... :/
i am lost for words..
Plug waiting to be pulled?! >_<
I..i could feel the emotions of all those grandchildren...
And when i imagined uruphoo in takako's place... a tear rolled down my cheek.. idk how...what..

Author's Response: I didn't think of setting the pool on fire, that'd be kind of difficult. I did go through a lot of scenarios on how I could leave, but obviously, I never brought them to fruition. I cried while writing this, so just imagine what it was like at the time: heartbreak beyond words. When it came to the 'plug waiting to be pulled' part, well, we were all thinking it the moment we saw him. We knew he wasn't going to make it. I guess this chapter left you pretty much speechless though, huh? Thanks for the review, I appreciate the feedback.


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