Reviews For Gifted
Name: Elspeth (Anonymous) · Date: 13/02/13 - 07:52 am · For: 6 - Instruments of Death
This story has given me a lot of smiles, even though it's sad how the very little Kakashi has been able to give Naruto has meant so much to him.
Name: Kym Hatake (Signed) · Date: 22/08/12 - 07:56 am · For: 6 - Instruments of Death
I sincerely hope that Kakashi is going to do something more for Naruto soon.
Not only showing up now and then but mybe clean up a little, explain the importance of a clean place (especially the kittchen) and show some training directions... but I'm afraid you are going to follow the manga and there Naruto didn't seem to know Kakashi at all...
I would love to see Kakshi reflecting a bit more about the fact that he is leaving his teacher down...
I am looking forward to your next chapter
Me
Name: Kym Hatake (Signed) · Date: 22/08/12 - 07:38 am · For: 5 - Festival Treats
Hi there :)
I was looking around and noticed that you not only added a new chapter but edited the last one as well. I just had to read it right then and have to compliment you. I liked the chapter in its original form but it is even better now.
I love to read a younger Kakashi and their interaction.
Thank you so much for your time and effort.
Me :)
Sorry for the mistakes, I'm not a native speaker
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 20/08/12 - 04:54 am · For: 4 - Surprises
I laughed when I saw that he was on his team. XD Was it for six months? Because six months without figureing out his name - that would be hilarious!
.............................T_T When did Rin die? Wahhhhhh...
I am in love with Asuma and his relationship with Kakashi. lovelovelovelovelove! You made me laugh and cry! XD
Bwahahahahahahahaa, owh gosh, I loooooove his warapping paper!
It's interesting. Who knows if I've commented on this before, but I like how he seems to be exhausted every year on this day. It seems like he's grieving, and then there's that lightness of giving that little birthday present. I LOVE IT!!!
I see you have another story! Congratulations on that! I will definitely check it out!
Author's Response: Ah, when Asuma said they were 'all on the same team' he meant in the broad sense that all Konoha shinobi are on the same "team" not that they are literal teammates... just so that's clear. ;) They haven't actually been teamed together at all. But that would have been funny... I decided not to go into the details of Rin's death in this story (at least not yet), but considering that Kakashi was in hard-core grieving mode... it was only a relatively short time before this chapter (and only based on my own assumption that she did die at some point). I love writing Kakashi and Asuma together, Kishimoto showed us just enough of their friendship to make me interested before he ruined it all by killing him. Anyway, glad that you liked it. And thanks for reviewing!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 19/08/12 - 10:21 am · For: 6 - Instruments of Death
Well, first I'll comment on the last chapter because I went and read the rewrite. It was definitely much better than the original in that scene with Kakashi approaching Naruto. So good job with that.
I also really enjoyed this chapter. It definitely came out very well, you wrote Kakashi perfectly. He was well in character and I loved the little bits of insight you provided that talked of his past. Cleanliness, buying weapons, it's the little things that help build Kakashi's character.
These acts of kindness from Kakashi are always really sweet, and I enjoy watching his feelings for Naruto grow.
Good work on this chapter, winterstrife. You did an excellent job with this update. I hope to read more of this soon.
Author's Response: Yeah, I like it better now that Kakashi had a more concrete reason to approach Naruto. I like to stick things in there to connect Kakashi's present to his past whenever I can, because I feel like he's the kind of guy who dwells on the past way too much... so I'm glad you like it. Thanks for reviewing!
Name: ONeill-Fan 14 (Anonymous) · Date: 15/08/12 - 11:26 am · For: 5 - Festival Treats
Where to start?
First of all thank you for writing a story that is focused on both Kakashi and Naruto. Kakshi is my favourite character and I just love to see him interact with Minato and / or Naruto.
In my opinion Minato and Kakashi were family to each other so it's only right that Kakashi and Naruto are as well. You showed this very well with the flashbacks and moments of interaction (more or less) between the two of them.
I like the way you descrieb Kakashis reactions, his inner conflicts and thoughts are very in-character.
Narutos way of reacting is also very likely and absolutely adorable.
I hope to read more of the two of them soon.
Thank you for the time and effort you spend on this story, it really made me smile!
Me
One last thing: sorry for my mistakes - I'm not a native speaker...
Author's Response: Haha, yes, Kakashi is one of my favorites, too! Personally, I prefer him with Minato over Naruto, but that's probably mostly because I think Kakashi as a kid is way too cute (even if he was a brat). Naruto's a little more difficult for me to write because his character is so extroverted and extreme, and he's changed so much since the flashbacks of his childhood so it's tough to know how he'd act, but I'm glad you approve of this portrayal! Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you like the story! (And your English is very good.)
Name: Ultimate NaruHina Fanboy (Signed) · Date: 01/06/12 - 01:59 am · For: 5 - Festival Treats
I'M GOING TO KILL THOSE VILLAGERS THAT MADE NARUTO'S LIFE HELL!then i might write a fic about me adopting naruto and giving him lots of presents
Author's Response: I don't know if "Hell" is quite the right term, but they certainly had a talent for making the poor boy miserable. But a fic about him being adopted by someone who cares is always a nice change! I just feel so sorry for him sometimes...
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 13/05/12 - 08:55 am · For: 5 - Festival Treats
Aww! This was so cute! This whole story is just so adorable! I really like how the first scene was something different, not just the same old setting of Kakashi hunting for a present on Naruto's birthday. It was a good change of pace.
The only thing I'm a bit iffy on is how Kakashi went up to Naruto nearly right away. I feel like he would be a bit more nervous upon the first approach; going up to him so soon seems a bit impulsive for Kakashi.
But this was still a really good chapter, I quite enjoyed it. Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! I don't know what I was thinking when in one paragraph, he didn't want to go anywhere near Naruto, and in the next, there he was... I'm pretty sure I had the whole mental process worked out in my head when I wrote it... and then left it all out. Oh, well, changed now, and I feel a little better about it. Anyway, thanks so much for reviewing!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 29/04/12 - 07:30 pm · For: 4.5 - Little People
T_T I don't know why, but this made me really sad! I think it was just seeing Naruto's innocence. And also knowing that he's so alone is heartbreaking as well. But this was also a really sweet chapter because Naruto knows someone out there likes him. It's such a nice thought.
You really wrote this chapter very well. It was really well portrayed through the eyes of a four year old. Great work, I loved this.
Author's Response: It is definitely sad how Naruto was treated when he was a kid. He's just so cute, and it's so easy to make a kid happy... I'm glad you thought it was a good portrayal--it's always challenging to write a young child, especially if they're a bit unusual. Thanks for the review, I'm glad that you liked it!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 18/04/12 - 06:41 pm · For: 4 - Surprises
Aww, how socially inept Kakashi is - I cracked up when he didn't understand Asuma telling him to wrap the gift XD
But yeah, in all seriousness, this was really good. I feel like this chapter was a bit more casual since we had another character in it. I liked it though because it did make the chapter more amusing to have someone follow Kakashi around.
Oh, and Kakashi's methods of dropping gifts off are really going to run out by the time Naruto turns old enough to catch him. How long is he going to keep this up? I'm personally very excited to see them meet :D
Great work on this chapter! It was definitely worth the wait! Thanks for posting this!
Author's Response: I agree, the addition of Asuma forces the chapter to be a little less introspective and more casual. It was fun--I've always loved Kakashi and Asuma together... they seem to be pretty friendly in the manga. :) I'm glad you liked the chapter, thank you for reviewing!
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 18/04/12 - 02:02 pm · For: 3 – Giving Memories
Yay! Update! i'm glad you've settled in to your new city. ^^ Hope you like it there!
LOL flesh eating hawks in uniforms.
I intensely loved this. The descriptions were vibrant and interesting, as well as the dialogue. I just found it odd that Kakashi is able to make such distances (back to his apartment, past the guards, etc, etc) when he's obviously so out of it. I understand that it's a quick reference, but perhaps you should mention his fatigue in those references?
oo, another thing - you didn't mention what time of the day it was until Kakashi was in front of the orphanage. I didn't know it was still light out until Kakashi was at the park with CHouji and Shikamaru. I believe I assumed it was dark because all the other chapters it was dark...
Awesome chap, can't wait for more! One more chap to go XD Are you planning to stop at eleven?
Author's Response: Thanks for the comments! I'll review it again sometime and see what I can do about it... but that may be a little ways down the road, until then, I'll keep it in mind for future chapters. Thanks! I'm planning on stopping... eventually. Probably, there will be around 14 chapters in total...?
Name: Konan (Signed) · Date: 24/03/12 - 10:48 am · For: 3 – Giving Memories
:) I loved it!
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 19/03/12 - 10:52 am · For: 2 – Good Intentions
Goshes, he's so sweet! I really love how you express his emotions so well. ^^ I'm sad there's only one chapter left until I have to wait.
Just a thought - I was thinking, wouldn't Kakashi visit the stone to pay tribute to the people besides the Yondaime too? His old teammates, his friends, etc.
The name Gifted really has a whole new meaning now. Awesome name, awesome banner, awesome story!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! One of my favorite features on this site is that it lets you display images and banners for your story, I love creating them and it's like the old saying goes: A picture's worth a thousand words. So it can help display the theme of your story without needing a long summary. If you're referring to the monument Kakashi visits at the end of chapter 1... In one of the manga chapters, I can't remember off hand which one, Naruto remembers going to the Yondaime's memorial with Jiraiya, and it's a memorial that has been constructed solely for the Yondaime. We usually see Kakashi at the obelisk commemorating all the shinobi who died in action in the war (presumably, as you said, to pay tribute to all the people he's lost), but I figure on the anniversary of his teacher's death, Kakashi would visit his memorial instead, and be focusing more on the loss of his teacher than his old teammates and friends.
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 19/03/12 - 10:43 am · For: 1 – A Conscious Effort
Haha, what a long day for poor Kakashi when it isn't even his own birthday. Really cute story ^^
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 18/03/12 - 06:42 pm · For: 3 – Giving Memories
Aww, I was honestly kinda looking forward to Kakashi giving the gift directly to Naruto. That'd be really cute.
I really do love this story so far though. It's really adorable. I enjoy Kakashi's crazy adventures of getting gifts and the memories he thinks of. It really adds so much depth to his character.
Excellent work on this chapter! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: It would be cute, and we will eventually see Kakashi and Naruto actually interract, at least a little... but I feel like Kakashi is still a little self-conscious about giving presents to someone, especially a little kid he doesn't really know. It's easy to do things under the cloak of anonymity, but to actually reveal yourself is a little harder. Glad you enjoyed the chapter, thanks for reviewing!
Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 18/03/12 - 04:34 pm · For: 3 – Giving Memories
I don't mind the wait, it's worth the peaceful chapter. I really like how you throw in random flashbacks of Minato, it gives both he, and Kakashi a little more depth than you see in the manga. I also like how you have Kakashi and Naruto indirectly acquainted with one another before Naruto becomes a Genin. The inclusion of Shikamaru and Choji was a very nice bit too. I'm once again thrilled to see you return in full force to the website :D Good luck with that cross country thing and the rest of this story!
Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 15/02/12 - 05:41 pm · For: 2 – Good Intentions
Did you know that Okami is also a word that can mean God? A half Japanese boy from my school told me that. ANyhow, this is a very heart warming story. I really like how the present tense pulls me right into Kakashi's thoughts. ANd you incorporate so many flash backs, you make the reason for kakashi's sullen personality so obvious. I'm really glad you came back to this sight. Down the Soddne hill was an early inspiration to me. Hopefully this story will lead me to write less depressing things :D ANyhow, great and wonderfully done work. I hope to see the next chapter soon!
Author's Response: Lol, yes, I knew that, but I hadn't actually thought of it when I picked that translation. Hopefully, it won't give Kakashi a big head. I admit, it's pretty fun to get inside his head as much as I have been doing in this story, and I'm glad you're enjoying it! I'm flattered that I was able to provide inspiration to anyone with DSH (but secretly, I really love it, too... it just sounds to presumptuous for me to say so). If I'm able to provide even more inspiration with this, that would be awesome! But depressing topics have their place, too... ;) Anyway, thank you very much for the review, I'll try to get the next chapter up relatively soon!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 14/02/12 - 02:10 pm · For: 2 – Good Intentions
T_T You're really trying to make me cry... This is just so gosh darn sweet! I already love Kakashi being so kind to Naruto, and Naruto's not even aware of Kakashi's existence (per se) yet. Ah, it's just such a nice beginning to the story so far, to see Kakashi being so kind to the little kid.
Nice job, winterstrife! I am really falling in love with this already. You have me hooked :D
Author's Response: Yes, you have discovered my evil plan to break down the will of humanity with pure Kakashi-Naruto sweetness and reduce everyone to a blubbering mass of tears! ... I'm really flattered that you find the story so touching; I feel like Kakashi must be a pretty sensative guy, for all that he's been hurt so badly, he's just good at hiding it. Well, hiding everything, really. But I'm on a tangent--thank you for reviewing, and I'm glad that you like this so much!
Name: JubileeOfPuppies (Signed) · Date: 12/02/12 - 09:53 am · For: 1 – A Conscious Effort
I keep seeing this story and I keep ignoring it. Then I saw the user name and I thought, Oh my god! I read your old story too! This is a great first chapter. It's not often that I see much of kakashi as a teen. And I love how you described his reluctance. You just portrayed everything so amazingly! I hope you get this going, I have no idea what you intend to do with it XD But the writing is so smoothly done that I scantly need a plot to read it! I'm not used to present tense, so this was a bit of an exercise for me lol I liked it anyway. Great work, update soon please!
Author's Response: Lol, well I'm glad you decided to read it after all! It's not much like my last story, but I'm glad to hear you're enjoying it! I'm glad you liked how it was written. I'm definitely not an expert at present tense (not many people write it, so it's pretty challenging to get a good feel for it), so I'm glad you liked that even though it's so unusual. Thank you for reviewing! I should have another update coming up in the next few days...
Name: Konan (Signed) · Date: 11/02/12 - 06:42 am · For: 1 – A Conscious Effort
Aww, I was drawn to this by Naruto's innocence, and I wasn't disappointed. Teen Kakashi's actions were so awkward but fitting. I like this kind style. Good luck with it!
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you like the story, especially written in this style. Yeah, Naruto's pretty cute at this point... but Kakashi's probably lucky he came while he was asleep. I have a feeling Naruto was a very loud baby.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 06/02/12 - 03:45 am · For: 1 – A Conscious Effort
Oh my gosh, you're back! It's so good to see you again with a new story. This first chapter was amazing too, I absolutely loved it.
The style, as you were worried about, really came out very nicely. Keeping that style consistent is the hard part, but I have no doubt that you can pull it off.
As for the content, well, it was really realistic and even very sweet. I was giggling a lot of the way through, just because Kakashi is just so awkward sometimes. You portrayed his feelings and emotions throughout this chapter, which really helped to go with the flow of it all. It also helped us to deeply understand his thoughts, which was also a nice gesture of writing.
Overall, excellent work. I can't wait to read more, I'm really excited to see more of this. Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response: Yep, I'm back! Thanks for the encouragement, I will do my best to do justice to this style of writing, and I'm glad that it's come out well so far. The content's a lot different from my last story, eh? Glad you liked it, and it came across as realistic--Kakashi's one of my favorite characters, so I always strive for the best when I write him... Anyways, thank you for reviewing!
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 05/02/12 - 11:19 pm · For: 1 – A Conscious Effort
Hi! Firstly, congrats on a new story. I like it so far, it's sweet and you conveyed the 'teen's' feelings really well.
I understand the style you're using 'cause I've totally misused this style before. You've obviously got the 'how' part down, and you probably know better than me, but this is a writing style that's hard to keep track of, you know what I mean? It's like, old habits die hard and sneak in, so if you're using this style, REREAD. ie, you made a (very) small mistake somewhere at the beginning of the chapter.
I liked the chapter, the story, and the depth. The style is a unique, rarely seen style, and works.
Truly looking forward to the next amazing story from *Winterstrife, author of "Down the Sodden Hill".
Author's Response: Thank you! I reviewed the chapter one more time and cleaned it up a little, and hopefully cleared up the mistake you saw. But, yes, it's a terribly hard style to keep track of, and I know exactly what you mean by that. I'm not giving up, though, I've tried writing in this style before and failed rather miserably, but this time I'm determined to see it through. Hopefully, I'll grow as an author during the process, along with providing something worthwhile for readers. Thank you again, I'm really glad to hear that it's working so far and you like the story!