TONFA
The Original Naruto Fanfic Archive

Main Categories

Het Romance [1092]
Any Naruto fanfiction with the main plot orientating around different sex couples.
Alternate Universe & Crossovers [651]
Where cast of the Naruto Universe are inserted into an alternate universe.
Essays & Tutorials [17]
An area to submit intelligent essays debating topics about the Naruto Universe and writing tutorial submissions.
 
General Fiction [1739]
Any Naruto fanfiction focused without romantic orientation, on a canon character in the current Naruto Universe.
OC-centric [865]
Any Naruto fanfic that has the major inclusion of a fan-made character.
Non-Naruto Fiction [291]
Self-evident
 
Shonen-ai/Yaoi Romance [1575]
Any Naruto fanfiction with the main plot orientating around male same sex couples.
MadFic [194]
Any fic with no real plot and humor based. Doesn't require correct spelling, paragraphing or punctuation but it's a very good idea.
 
Shojo-ai/Yuri Romance [106]
Any Naruto fanfiction with the main plot orientating around female same sex couples.
Fan Ninja Bingo Book [125]
An area to store fanfic information, such as bios, maps, political histories. No stories.
 
 

Site Info

Members: 11985
Series: 261
Stories: 5884
Chapters: 25418
Word count: 47689150
Authors: 2162
Reviews: 40828
Reviewers: 1750
Newest Member: Redxkenny
Challenges: 255
Challengers: 193
 


Reviews For Buried Memories

Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 14/12/11 - 06:29 pm · For: What was once mine
Okay, I really like the back story that you're giving your character. Authors who send their OCs into the Naruto world rarely ever give any kind of background to their protagonist, so I'm glad you actually took the time to do so.

I have to agree with Rowanrose that you need to make your readers feel what is going on, rather than just telling us. During that entire scene of her being attacked, I did not even shudder. And I'm usually pretty squeamish, so the horror in this wasn't exactly thrilling enough.

As of now, I'm not... hooked on the story yet. But I'm not completely turned off either. It's the fact that there are a plethora of stories like this that inhabit the fanfic sites. If you can show me that this is different, I'll give you mad props. You already have the potential, seeing as how you've developed your character already within the first chapter. You have potential, and this story has promise. I look forward to seeing how this turns out. Keep up the good work.


Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 13/12/11 - 06:21 pm · For: What was once mine
wow-wow-wow!

Alright, since I think that Constructive Reviews are the best, and since you deserve the best, here I go.

You're really good. You're waaay better than me when I first started on Tonfa.

I think making your writing a little more clear would help; whow where she's at and make a clear distinction between scenes and trains of thought. Revision is the friend who annoys you the most but is helps you the most while she's at it.
The beginning jumped into the thick of things in a non confusing way, actually, but you know the number one rule? Show rather than Tell. Try to show her hatred instead of describing it, in any way you can. Say she comes home and her mom isn't there and she's happy, or something, I don't know.

I look forward to the next installment! I'll make another review to help you on some basics, like photos and so on.


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