Reviews For Sun Warriors
Name: nightninja (Signed) · Date: 07/10/18 - 09:49 am · For: Prologue: The Beginning.......
Hey can I be in your story
Name: RawrTheDinoLycan (Signed) · Date: 05/12/11 - 03:06 pm · For: Children of the Sun
OH Eff me sideways this will be interesting lol
Quit leaving hangers like that damnitt! Haha
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 04/12/11 - 07:50 pm · For: Children of the Sun
This is really a good start! I can't understand why you doubted your writing abilities before, but this was a really well done first chapter. I didn't see too many mistakes, and the flow of yor writing is really good. Nice job with this, keeo up the good work.
Name: RawrTheDinoLycan (Signed) · Date: 04/12/11 - 07:35 am · For: Prologue: The Beginning.......
.... Moooooooooooooore?
And I actually kinda like the title lol
Author's Response: Yeah, you'll get more soon. I'm off to write it now. I changed the title in the end from Our Paths because I think Silverwolf is right about Sun Warrior being better.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 03/12/11 - 05:03 am · For: Prologue: The Beginning.......
Wow... This is a pretty epic prologue. I really liked the background you gave Kumori. It's realistic and makes a good base for the story. There was one mistake I saw in the second paragraph, where you did: Uchitora, but that's it.
Good job on this start to the story, I think I'll like where this is going ;) Keep up the good work with your writing.
Oh, as for titles... I don't know, I personally like Sun Warriors. I think it works.
Author's Response: Yeah, I was going to have her be part of the Leaf and meet Naruto and the others, but I decided against it. I think I like this version better anyway. Crap, I was afraid I would do that. For some reason I always think Uchitora instead of Uchitoru. Looks like I only did that once, though, so that's a good thing =D. Yeah, I've changed the title. If you like it better, it's bound to be better =D. Anyway, I'm glad that you liked it.