This was overall, very cute. I quite like Kisa, her innocence as a child was really well portrayed in this. I really liked the way her childish naivety was illustrated, especially with the Akatsuki and Yuki. It makes it so funny in my mind, personally.
As for your concerns in the beginning, about being a good writer, don't worry. You're a brilliantly insightful and unique writer. Your grammar is the only issue, but I feel rather redundant by repeating it.
But anyway, great job on this story! I always enjoy reading your writing, it always makes me happy :) Keep up the wonderful work with your writing!
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like Kisa. I'm not so sure where I was going with her but I think I have her in a pretty stable spot right now with her. I'm also glad I she seems childish and that her child like manners shows.
Please ignore my comment about being a good writer, (whenever I do that). I think this is one my worst stories seeing how I had soo much mistakes, the paper I printed out is red with mistakes. No idea what I was thinking, oh welll I'm fixing right now. Sorry once again for the Grammar mistakes btw.
I'm glad you like reading my stories, thanks for your reviews.