Reviews For Aftermath: The Last Ones Standing
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 27/09/11 - 03:05 pm · For: Girlfriend in a Coma
Oh man, I wonder who this girl is...
Oh, I really like the bit about the memorial stone. It's tragic, yet it's also kind of nostalgic, so it makes me angry that the original was destroyed... That's what happens in war, I guess...
Nice work on this chapter! I must read the next one now :D
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 27/09/11 - 01:54 pm · For: Possibly Maybe
Holy crap, more KibaSaku fluff. Now I don't know if I'm happy or upset about that. I mean, it's cute and all, but what about Kakashi?! What'll happen to the KakaSaku?! *sigh* Well anyway, it sounds like Sakura has figured out about the poison; I sure hope they catch him soon. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Here's a minor spoiler: I completely forgot to reveal the identity of the poisoner (as I really just made him up to get Kiba and Sakura away from Konoha)... I might pick up on that in chapter... 65 ... or something.... if I ever rewrite the story, this subplot will be the first thing I'm going to change/revamp, as I feel really bad about its... unresolvedness. Oh, and btw. thank you so much for your consistent feedback! It really means a lot to me!!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 27/09/11 - 01:40 pm · For: Haunted
Oh... Shikamaru's condition really makes me so sad... It's so hard to see him so vulnerable and frightened, yet it really flows into the story so well... It was great to see this updated, nice job on this chapter! Keep up the great work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 09/09/11 - 10:13 am · For: Blood Makes Noise
O_O The Hokage himself is going crazy... Very spooky indeed.
Oh, this entire chapter was in italics, so I'm wondering if you accidentally forgot to cancel it? Just thought I'd let you know.
But anyways, interesting chapter. Poor Kakashi is slowly losing his mind, huh? Well, I wonder how things will turn out for him...
Keep up the good work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 08/09/11 - 12:09 pm · For: Wild is the Wind
.... Hmm....
Don't worry, I'm not going to bite your head off about making those two intimate. I like most fics with Kiba, because honestly, there aren't enough of them.
I thought it was very cute in the beginning, actually. I imagined it as both friendly and romantic. Then when things got more intense, I wondered what was going through Sakura's mind in terms of her feelings for Kakashi.
Overall, I actually liked it :D Keep up the awesome work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 07/09/11 - 03:31 am · For: We are nowhere and it's now
*cries... a lot* Um... yeah, I know Kiba hasn't died (yet, you could still be holding that over me), but still, you killed his heart by killing Akamaru... How he is still a ninja is beyond me, but of course I'm glad he's not cut out of the story or anything...
Crud, this assassin is going to jump in out of nowhere and scare the crap out of everyone... I wonder if it's anyone we know?
Well, this was a very emotional chapter, just like the rest of this story, so good job on that ;) I definitely look forward to more, so keep up the awesome work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 06/09/11 - 09:40 am · For: Flowers on the Wall
O_O Wow... I was just about to say that Shikamaru was really losing it, but if the drawings make sense, then maybe he's not as crazy as everyone is making him out to be.
That makes me slightly happy at the prospect of upcoming drama and action :D I can't wait to see what happens next! Keep up the good work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 06/09/11 - 06:57 am · For: Damaged People
First, in response to your response... I'm scared about what you're going to do to Kiba! You're either going to kill him or have him fall in love with Sakura, and I don't know which I'd rather go for in this situation!
Right, anyway, I liked this chapter because that little obstacle in Sakura's way to Kakashi is a good way to either strengthen her feelings or diminish them. I wonder how she'll manage...
Well, I'm eagerly awaiting for more, so I hope the next one comes soon! Keep up the good work!
Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 06/09/11 - 04:19 am · For: Dead Friends
T_T Oh, that's not nice. You've got me crying with Sakura. All those characters we've bonded with are dead. I loved it, though, despite it's sadness. That last part with Naruto and Sasuke was so amazing (and amazingly sad). I'm glad that in the end, Naruto got to be with his friend, though.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 05/09/11 - 02:56 pm · For: Falling Is Like This
Hmm, not too bad with the budding relationship here. I like how things are proceeding so far. Good job ;) Keep up the nice work with this!
Author's Response: Thanks :)rnHeh, after reading your profile-page... I seriously hope you're not going to kill me for what's going to come next :D
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 05/09/11 - 09:34 am · For: I found a Reason
Very nice. It's good that you're showing how everyone is growing up and taking on responsibility.
I really liked Sakura's response to Ino, the way she avoided saying she's in love. "I just realised that there's still a whole lot left to live for." That's a wonderful line.
Nice job on this chapter. I like where this is going, and I can't wait for more. Keep up the great work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 04/09/11 - 07:16 am · For: Epiphany
Hmm, I guess you could call it nitpicking, yes. But on the bright side, I really have nothing to nitpick on this chapter.
It was honestly very captivating for me. Kakashi's care for Sakura came across so well, and Sakura's confused feelings were so amazingly portrayed. And in the last scene, where Sakura looks out over the village, she finally comes to realize that she can move on with her life, and I really like how you illustrated her emotions in that scene.
This was an excellent chapter. I was very impressed with how realistic you kept everyone's reactions. Keep up the great work!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 03/09/11 - 05:31 pm · For: The Magician's Assistant
First, in response to your response to my review, I'm sorry if I came across as mean. I didn't know English wasn't your first language, though I probably should have picked up on that from the quote thing...
Well, this chapter was a lot better in terms of spelling. There are some instances where it looks like you may have forgotten a word or the order of words was mixed up. But other than that, I think it was an improvement.
I really like where this story is going, I really do. It's not the usual sugarcoated stuff that people write usually. You're writing about real issues that occur after wars, and I appreciate that. This is definitely a story with potential. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: I didn't think you came across as mean. It's just - I myself tend to be quite nitpicking (is that the word you'd use here? I'm not sure...) when it comes to grammar and spelling, so I felt like I should apologise for my lack of ...ehm... linguistic perfection... ^^rnrnAgain, thank you!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 03/09/11 - 04:30 am · For: Scatterbrain
First off, I repeat what I said about the spacing. Also, your spelling is off. Your grammar in terms of dialogue is off as well; you're not using quotes to show who is speaking, it looks like you're using commas. Just clean that up a bit.
Now, for the chapter... I liked it. To make Shikamaru of all people lose his mind...it's a sad bit of irony as a result of the war, but it is very believable. I liked how you portrayed him: confused, wild, angry, his normal lazy and quiet personality completely gone.
Nice job. Keep up the good work with this story.
Author's Response: Thank you for your feedback! And your critique!! rnAbout the spacing, I have this nasty habit of pressing shift+enter... I don't know why, and I kind of like it. In fact, double-spacing tends to confuse me, most of the time. And the spelling/grammar - maybe I should have mentioned somewhere that English is not my first language and I don't have anyone to betaread the text. These first chapters I wrote a month ago, after I had not made active use of this foreign language for quite some time. I do believe (at least I hope) that it's getting better as the story progresses. (Anyway, I'll check the last and coming chapters again. To be frank, I didn't before I uploaded them here, as it has been a while since I finished them. So thanks for pointing it out!)rnThe quotes that look like commas are quotes, I simply forgot to tell openoffice to use the ones common in English instad of the ones used in German and when I realised this was too lazy to correct it. I thought it would be obvious (obviously, as I am used to these quotes...), but if this really is so confusing I'll change it.rnrnAgain, thanks for the feedback. I really appreciate it!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 03/09/11 - 04:20 am · For: Dead Friends
Wow... That last scene where Sakura sees the portrait of Naruto and Sasuke was so sad... Your description of the memorial was very good, I could clearly imagine it in my mind.
There was no spacing, making everything clumped together and a bit hard to read. But other than that, I liked it. Nice job.
Author's Response: Ha! No, I figured it out. rnI didn't know spacing had to be added via html-code here. rnI can't believe I had not noticed this...rnSo, uhm, thanks for pointing it out!