Reviews For The Greatest Lie
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 03/06/11 - 07:04 am · For: Chapter 2
So.... confusing. And yet... it's so good. Everything seems so bewildering, and yet, it's oddly addicting. Definitely can't wait to read more. The first chapter had me in suspense, and this chapter had me falling out of my chair in surprise. I really like this so far, even though I'm not sure what's going on, but I'll leave the explaining up to you. I hope you update faster this time! Good job on this, it was awesome!
Author's Response: I'm currently writing the next chapter now :) I'm glad I surprised people xD I even surprised myself because I usually never write stories like this. Thank you for your review.
Name: Rowanrose (Signed) · Date: 04/05/11 - 11:54 am · For: Chapter 1
Oh wow. Those last two want to help her? Cool. I was thinking, oh, some other ppl who want to kill her.
THis is interesting so far, but slightly confusing. The sudden shifts of scene is sorta disorienting. Other than that it was interesting. But I sort of don't want it to be another NarutoxOC... is it?
Also, the idea of her being an innocent murderer is nice and original. It brings to mind itachi and you feel sympathy for the man trying to kill her, if she really did kill his entire family.
Author's Response: In a sense they want to help her, but you'll have to wait to find out how they do so :)rnrnThe scene changes will be explained in later chapters, I don't want to give too much away. To be honest I think it will be slightly NarutoxOC, but I'm not sure because I'm writing this as I go along.
Name: Swrestler12 (Signed) · Date: 04/05/11 - 09:09 am · For: Chapter 1
Oh my goodness, this is so interesting. I am actually curious as to what will happen next. Good job, please continue writing
Author's Response: Thank you :D I will x
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 04/05/11 - 03:49 am · For: Chapter 1
I feel that the beginning was a tad rushed. It would have been niced to have a little description on what Naruto and Sakura were doing in that area, how old they are, where they are, stuff like that.
And then when the intensity of the chapter started, your writing got better. You did very well with the fight scene. It was suspenseful and attention-getting. I wish it was a bit longer, but hey, what can you do?
Then, when the scenes began changing into something different, it kind of weirded me out. I really want to know what is up with that.
This was very interesting. It was an impressive start to the story, opening up the storyline very nicely. Good job with this, and I hope you update soon.
Author's Response: Yeah I noticed the beginning was rushed, I was in a hurry to get all my thoughts down before I got too lazy to write. I'll be sure to add why they were there in the next chapter. rnrnThank you! I'm trying to better myself when it comes to details and fight scenes, and hearing that makes me feel accomplished. I'll try to make the fight scenes longer in the future :)rnrnYou'll find out about the scene changes in the near future, I think it confused a lot of people. It confused me too when I first wrote it out, I didn't know where I was going with it at first, but now I know for sure. rnrnThank you for the review, I really appreciate it. I hope I update soon too x__x