Reviews For Fantasy Land
Name: shadow4000 (Signed) · Date: 27/06/11 - 10:37 am · For: Prologue
nice...!
so iin ur dream u were madalyn?
n u felt all tthat pain?
Author's Response: yea
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 24/06/11 - 01:46 pm · For: Chapter 6
Wow! You are update-crazy today!
Nice chapter. Poor Sasuke, I sorta felt bad for him.... sorta....
But Itachi and Madalyn's idea was very clever. That was a really cool way of tricking Sasuke, I thought they were done for. Nice originality.
And the romance starts to blossom, not too quickly but not too slowly. Nice job, you're progressing it really well just through dialogue and the small little things like blushing and stuttering.
There was actually a point in this chapter where it switched from first person to third person and then back again. I was confused for a minute, but I eventually figured it out. Just be sure to change that, I think it was only a few lines, nothing that major.
But this was a really good chapter. Excellent work, your writing has greatly improved (I know I keep saying this. Great job, keep up the amazing work!
Author's Response: Oh, sorry about that. I wrote the first part of this a while back, and then I wrote the last part today. I have switched perspectives in my writing, and I will go back and change that. Thanks so much for giving your feedback!! =)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 10/04/11 - 12:45 pm · For: Author's note NOT A BAD THING!!!!
Jeez, I saw Author's Note and nearly had a heartattack. Then I read the rest of the title and sighed in relief.
Anyways, Kayla had a nice start to 'Fantasy Land: Our Perspective'. Well-written and informative. Chilling and thrilling. Tell her I say hi and good luck in her writing. :)
Anyways, chapter 6. I smiled the entire time. Poor, poor Sasuke (beginning and end of chapter). And you actually did a nice job on the romance intro. It was short, but you know what? That was just the start of their relationship, so it shouldn't have been long and intense and passionate. Of course, eventually, as their relationship progresses, your writing will have to evolve as well. But I know you can handle it because you are already an awesome writer. And it is important for an author to challenge him/herself. So keep up the good work!
(And omg! I was mentioned! =D )
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 09/04/11 - 05:14 pm · For: Chapter 4
Best.... invasion force.... ever.
I didn't see it coming, but I loved it. Very unique about the cloaks. I can just imagine the 50 people wearing the eerie-looking cloaks. And it sent me chills, really. Madalyn's got some heavy allies, doesn't she? All those people there really surprised me. But then, I guess I shouldn't have been surprised to see them, considering it is you as the author ;) Anyways, I think you should attempt the ItachiXMadalyn pairing. I think it would be interesting. And I honestly would like to see you attempt a romance, since I haven't read one by you yet. I feel it would be a nice challenge for one of my favorite authors. ;D
Keep up the good work with this. I really like this, so update quickly again? Hopefully?
Author's Response: Thanks! I will totally do the pairing, and I am so excited to write it. I am going to start writing it now, so you can read newest chapter tonight or tomorrow morning. Thanks so much for supporting me!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 09/04/11 - 03:43 pm · For: Chapter 3
Nice! Very nice! And yes, your story is making for a very exceptional story. It's getting very interesting now. I look forward to finding out what is up with this girl. Will Itachi be returning or has he left already? Kinda upsetting if he's gone... But anyways, I look forward to seeing where this story goes now that Madalyn is going on the chase after that mystery girl.
Author's Response: I will update now. Oh look I updated. Read it. rnI am so happy that you like this story. It is the story that started it all, after all. Thanks so much for reviewing! rnItachi is one of my favorite characters, so he won't be going anywhere. I briefly thought of making a romaance with Itachi and Madalyn, yet I didn't think fans would like it. What do you think? Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 03/04/11 - 06:09 pm · For: Chapter 2
WHAT?! You decide to end it there?! Of all things?! Jeez... the plot thickens greatly, and here I am, falling out of my chair in suspense!
That was the fastest update I have ever seen you make, I am very happy to read two chapters in one day! I'm just not happy about a crazy cliffhanger like that....
Do you think you could make another speedy update again? I want to see Itachi get involved! Things are getting so much more interesting, and I'm so excited for this! Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: sorry, so I take it my dream makes an OK fanfiction? I am glad you like it. So so sorry about the cliffy, i will update by tomorrow. =)
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 03/04/11 - 11:10 am · For: Chapter 1
Okay, that's it. This is what I wanted. This has awesomeness written all over it. Your character seems strong, which you know I love :) And things are starting to pick up really nicely. I am now very excited to see where this is headed. It does need a little more description in certain places, but I know you can fix that! Keep up the good work with this story, I'm really getting interested now!
Name: silverwolf1213 (Signed) · Date: 29/03/11 - 03:34 am · For: Prologue
The character kinda sounds like Madeline from One Little Girl. Her physical description, her personality, her parents... I'm sorry to say that this character didn't make me feel any different than your other OC did.
I will say that your description of other worlds and such did get me intrigued. And as a whole, this chapter was very well-written. Descriptive and dark, and it really mixes very well.
I hope that this story is not the same as One Little Girl. I'm hoping for something extraordinary and so unique that it blows my mind. I know you can do it, so I'm hoping for an update very soon! :)
Author's Response: I wrote this story a long time ago. I actually got the idea of one little girl from this. The character will be sort of the same, sort of different. Totally different plot though. There is anothe main character who will be revealed in a few chapters. She is the exact opposite of Madalyn though. I hope you like though.
Name: MidnightStar (Signed) · Date: 28/03/11 - 07:48 pm · For: Prologue
Awesome! It's very well written. I really like your style. I like the idea too. Can't wait to see what comes next!
Author's Response: Ahhh thanks. Your comment makes me smile. I will update super soon. Thanks so much for reading, you've made my day