i love this and i cant wait till the next chapter

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review and thanks for reading!

Aww, poor Yumika, I really do feel bad for her... Haha, don't worry, your summaries of the other matches wasn't lame at all. It was much quicker than having to read something I've probably seen a hundred times already :P

Anyway, nice chapter! It's good to see you back. I hope you update soon! Keep up the awesome work!

Wow. That was so awesome! I absolutely love it. It's definitely an interesting twist to the whole Uchiha sibling plot. I really love stories that can use a frequently used plot and make it into something mind blowing. And I can tell you that you so have. This chapter was amazing. I liked the talk between Ayako and Sasuke. And I really liked Sasuke threatening Naruto. That was pretty funny.

Author's Response: Thanks, I really tried to make this story as awesome as it apparently is. I truthfully thought that the first 5-6 chapters, not including the the first, was pretty rough and not very good. But thank you for letting me know that you enjoy them. I hope you continue reading, and loving my story!

Oh crap, I thought you were serious about the KakashiXAyako thing. Yeesh...

Now this chapter was much better than the previous one. This one had a much better flow with it. The description was awesome, and Ayako's reaction to... well, everything was brilliantly portrayed. I was on the edge of my seat for this one.

When Ayako finally snapped on Orochimaru, the dialogue between them was so intense, and then my growing suspicions were confirmed when he offered Ayako to come to him as well. *shivers* Yikes...

Excellent job with this chapter! I liked this one a lot more, as your style was much better in this. Keep up the great work!

Author's Response: To be honest I wrote this one before I finished the other one ^_^ because I had the urge to and it just came to me. Haha you thought I was serious? no no no that wouldn't be very realistic in the story, besides I have other plans :) Well, thanks for your thoughts again! I'm glad you liked this.

Now that was an incredible fight. Sachida, no matter how much of a piece of scum he is, was actually a decent fighter. Considering his personality earlier in the story, I thought he would be relatively weak. I'm glad you actually made him 'somewhat' worthy, though I did like the classic brain vs brawn comparison. Sachida didn't stand a chance against Ayako, but I'm impressed with the battle that unfolded between them. Excellent job. Keep up the great work.

Author's Response: Thanks for your thoughts. I really appreciated them and I'm really glad you're liking this story. In the beginning I was going to make Ayako be the one to beat the snot out of him and she'd win that way, but then I remembered what is supposed to happen later on but also the fact that, Sachida was supposed to come off as a blunt, ignorant character. So basing it off that, I realized why not write it this way, and have Ayako be the smart one and play around with it. Anyway, thanks again and I hope you continue reading. :)

Wahoo *cheer*
Ayako officially kicks ass!

BWahaha, the scene with her and Naruto cracked me up :P

Author's Response: Hell yeah she does! :) And I know right? It actually made me crack up when I thought about it! Thanks for the review :)

Wow... Just wow.

This was amazing! It was just so great. I loved every second of it. I hate the fact that it is going to be forever, though. Seeing all the hate she has to go through, I think it's wrong to take her parents from her when she seems to partly/mostly (not sure which one) be doing this to make them proud. I loved it, though, and I can't wait to read the next chapter. Which I can =D

Author's Response: Awww Thank you! I'm so grateful that you love this! I really hope you continue too as well. :) And I know, I'm such an awful person (lol). Thanks for reading!

And here I was, expecting the typical Sasuke vs what-his-face match. And then WHAM! You throw that in, and I'm quite proud, actually. It's so nice to see some more twists, nice thinking ;D

I'm so excited for the epic rematch! Oh, so you have your reasons for Sasuke not going first, eh? Well, I can't wait to see what you have in store. Great work on this one, I actually like how you took the time to describe what happened while Team Shizen was hanging around in their room. It's a nice change of pace that no one actually takes the time to describe, and I like how you did it.

Awesome job with this chapter, you're really improving on this story, and it's becoming very exceptional. Nice job, keep up the amazing work!

Author's Response: All intended my faithful reader, all intended. Haha so I'm glad you're excited to read it because I'm excited to write it! Which I am starting to right now. :DrnAnd I'm glad you liked my little descriptions. I personally thought they were boring. But at least I did something pretty original. rnLastly, I can't thank you enough for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate it and I will try and make the fight scene mind blowing!

Yet another great scene! :D Can't wait to see the preliminaries because Ayako will kick ass lol

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Wow, nice! I think it really is starting to flow a lot better. With BattyBigSister's advice, I think you were able to find your footing with this and make it seem more realistic. And you're showing a bit more of Ayako's emotions. Good job! I think you tied in a lot of loose ends with personalities, emotions, and actions and such in this chapter. Excellent work!

For the question, I think I would want to cut off Orochimaru's head when his neck is super long. I really think that would be interesting if someone did that :P

Good work with this chapter. Keep up the great work, I hope the next chapters come out just as good as these last two!

Author's Response: Phew...*wipes forehead* if only I could've written this good from the beginning. :( But anyways, I'm glad you liked this and thank you for being such a faithful reader! I really appreciate it. As for your answer to my question I thought it was great. I imagined it myself and it actually made me think why they didn't do that in the real Naruto Show. Ya know? Well thanks again, and I agree with you on that last part. I hope I write the next chapters as good as I did with these two.

*nods head* Yeah, this one is a lot cooler. And more realistic. Good work, everything seemed a lot better. It was an epic fight with a great flow to it.

For 3, I think your characters are really cool. You really did start showing more of their individual personalities during the exams, second round especially.

For 4, I think Ayako will try to change her brother, but she will be disappointed that he would resort to actually wanting and enjoying the power of the seal.

Nice job so far, keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I honestly feel a little dumb for not writing it this way in the first place! Also, I'm glad that you like my O.C.s and are responding to the questions. Hope you keep reading! :)

There were quite a few errors in Nishiya's speech. Otherwise it was quite a nice scene. I enjoyed the description of the bird song at the beginning of the chapter.

1: Because she's secretly phobic of blowflies... and somehow they always seem to end up on the test. ;0) That wasn't intended as a serious answer, however you've clearly gone out of your way to give her some kind of insecurity regarding her own clan that makes her feel she shouldn't be there, especially given that she had to leave the village as a child. Beyond that, I couldn't say. Possibly her clan pride themselves on working discretely from the shadows?

Did you write out the dialogue from memory? I could be wrong - but some elements didn't ring quite true with what I remembered. I know it's AU & therefore it doesn't have to be identical, but try to keep the flow & style of the dialogue similar. Here it often felt a bit hurried and summarised - which meant it lost a lot of impact compared against the original scene.
Otherwise this was okay. A little more detail would have been nice though.