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Reviews For Inner Demons

Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 08/02/10 - 02:29 pm · For: The Demon Within
Okay, that was really short, but I still liked it. Right more soon, please!

Author's Response: don't worry, the next one will be longer.


Name: Sasaui Uchiha (Signed) · Date: 01/02/10 - 03:32 pm · For: The Demon Within
Yeah! It's back. Oh, BTW, I'm bre2k8, only I got a new account. I really liked this chapter and can't wait to find out about the whole 'Kage' thing. Please write again soon!

Author's Response: thanks! because of school i haven't been able to write much, but now i'll have more time.


Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 27/09/09 - 05:41 am · For: The Demon Within
Okay,I'm not sure if you got your idea from it or if it was by accident,but that sounds kinda like when Ichigo fought his inner HOLLOW(yours is inner DEMON)I don't know,it may just be my imagination.anyways,it's a good chapter.I can't wait to read more.

P.S.When's the next chapter of Shadow Blade coming out?

Author's Response: The next chapter to shadow blades will come out soon, and it is probably my subconsious making the story go where it's going.


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 27/09/09 - 12:54 am · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Oh, dear lord, Sasuke would be such a douche bag to teach. I can imagine how he would react.

"Do it this way, Sasuke." *shows him the correct way*

"No, that's wrong."

"How is that wrong?!"

"Because I came up with a better way, dobe."

"Well, you're way is STUPID!"

*big fight*

XD Well... that's how he would react to ME teaching him. XD

Anyways, interesting twist although I'm quite sure that Sasuke would not have been take so easily.

7/10

Author's Response: sorry I don't have the writing skills to please everyone, i've only been writing for about 1 year, so i'm not very good yet with details. Yes, these things are from Bleach, but it wasn't my intention at first, my mind just makes things up as it goes along. Glad you like Zabuza, because he will be coming back for revenge.


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 27/09/09 - 12:46 am · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Blllllllllleeeeeeaaaaaach. Lots of Blllllllllleeeeeeaaaaaach. XD

Once again: vague fight scene. Great ideas, though.

7/10


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 27/09/09 - 12:40 am · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Good to see that everyone's getting along. Very vague fight scene, though. *stuffs mouth with paper to keep herself from nagging* =x=

Anyways, cool jutsu! Asuma kinda got his butt kicked there. XD

7/10


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 27/09/09 - 12:35 am · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Ishida and Zaraki, eh? Bleach-a-fied the ninja world up a bit more, did you? XD

I would have been interested in finding out how Yoko and Haru met Sosuke, but beggers can't be choosers. Interesting team!

As for Neji finding out about Sosuke, not surprised, really. Sosuke should have thought about that before he had left. Tsk! Tsk!

8/10


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 27/09/09 - 12:28 am · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Alrighty. What does the Nentoukage look like? Are there headbands? Ect, ect. Man, I am NOT good at not mentioning the lack of details... XD

It's intereting, though. The Mind Village is surrounded by Genjutsu. Very crafty. XD

8/10


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 27/09/09 - 12:24 am · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Ah! Finally! A mention of the Mind village! *high fives you* Sorry about that. I always high five when I get excited. *laughs nervously*

I have to say, I've been ignoring the fact that you have been combining paragraphs. I suppose it makes the multi-pargraph look bigger, but it also makes your characters look like they are talking to themselves.

And the information those people were giving to Sosuke was rather vivid. XD

Very cool! I can't wait to see what the Mind village looks like!

7/10


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 27/09/09 - 12:18 am · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Hmm... Normal review. Great ideas, more details. *covers mouth mouth and mumbles angrily to self*

Glad to see Zabuza. Always thought he was a cool guy. *high fives him*

Zabuza: O_o

7/10


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 26/09/09 - 11:52 pm · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Interesting. I wouldn't have thought that Sosuke would have been alienated that quickly. I wonder how Sasuke, Naruto, Kakashi and the others took this. *hinthint* XD

It sad to see Sosuke have to run like that. At least he got out of there without actually having to engage in a battle and becoming an even worse criminal.

7/10


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 26/09/09 - 11:44 pm · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Um... where did Kiba and the others come from? You never even stated that they were there to begin with. Details! XD *slaps my hand* I'm done. XD

Very interesting chapter. Poor Sosuke's dad... At least he was there to help, I suppose. *pats Sosuke on the back*

So, what happened to the others? They didn't react to Itachi and a bunch of missing-nin breaking into Konohagakure? ... *smacks self* I need to stop with this details rant. XD

Interesting twist!

7/10


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 26/09/09 - 11:35 pm · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Yup. Bleach-a-fied ninja! *raises fist into the air* HOO-HAA! XD

Anyways, still lacking details, but I'm not going to nag for the third chapter ina row about because you'll just ignore me if I do. XD

Anyways, great ideas, but more details, please!

7/10


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 26/09/09 - 11:30 pm · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Once again, Bleach reference? Is this character some sort of Bleach-a-fied ninja? XD

Well, at least it would make this interesting. Not a lot of dialog at all and nearly no action to speak of. I'm very glad to see that those attacks at least have some sort of blacklash that the OC in question did not know about. Very good to see that.

But the story is (as I said before) lacking details. If there's no dialog, how are we going to know how this person reacts to certain people? Does he speak with respect to Sasuke? Is he mean to Naruto? Does he find Kakashi ridiculous?

Nice story, but you could add a bit more to it.

7/10


Name: anime_fr3ak (Signed) · Date: 26/09/09 - 11:23 pm · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Very interesting beginning... but you made this far too simple and undone. It seems like you skipped tons of things that would have made this more interesting.

For example:

"I sheathed the one I was holding and drew the black one, once I started to channel my chakra through it, I felt a wierd sensation, I could feel my chakra still connected to me even though it was in the sword. Now the hard part, how to get my chakra back? After a while, I figured out that if I imagined the sword as part of my hand, I could focus it the same way I would focus chakra to other parts of my body."

How hard was that? What was this character thinking? Did having the chakra extending out that far have any effect on the characters feelings and if so, what were they? Did it leave him slightly tired? If so, how tired? Things like that.

And it's not just there, but I'll leave it at that.

And did you use ideas from Bleach for the name? SĂ´suke (Aizen) and Kuchiki (Rukia, Byakuya, ect.) come from that. Not to mention the blades' colors (black (Ichigo's Bankai) and white (Zangetsu's Bankai))... I could be wrong, but who knows?

Well, I'll be reading the rest of this (unless I get distracted... which happens... a LOT XD), so be looking forward to my reviews... or loathing to read them... XD

8/10


Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 30/08/09 - 04:34 pm · For: The Demon Within
Wow!That was amazing,eldertensa!


Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 19/08/09 - 06:07 pm · For: The Demon Within
OH!!!I can't wait until the next chapter!!!!It is SOOOOO good!!!!!

Author's Response: I am very glad you enjoy my story. Thank you very much for constantly reveiwing.


Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 18/08/09 - 08:12 am · For: The Demon Within
I really like this chapter.I can't wait to see what will happen when Sosuke becomes a sensei

Author's Response: Thank you for reveiwing so much.


Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 17/08/09 - 05:22 pm · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Is this story really completed?From what I read,it doesn't sound like the end.Anyways,it was a great story,and I absolutely loved it.


Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 17/08/09 - 05:14 pm · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Wow,I love this story.I hate that the next chapter is the last T-T


Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 17/08/09 - 07:05 am · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Great chapter,and I like that she let Sosuke free.Well,I'm going to take a small break on your stories so I can work on my own,so I'll probably be reading it again pretty soon.


Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 17/08/09 - 06:59 am · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
really good chapter.I love reading your story soooo much!


Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 12/08/09 - 06:00 pm · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
yeah,that was really short.I really like how you did that.With all the genjutsu and the village name.Quiet clever.


Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 12/08/09 - 05:58 pm · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
Realization.Just wanted to tell you that's how you spell it,not relisation.Anyways,it was a good chapter,but I think you're chapters are a bit short..Not that that's a problem or anything.


Name: bre2k8 (Anonymous) · Date: 12/08/09 - 05:54 pm · For: The villiage hidden in the mind
it's really good!I love your story!!!!


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