Name: Anonymous (Anonymous) · Date: 21/10/11 - 07:25 pm · For: Chapter 1: The Game Begins!

One thing, this has potential. You seriously need to stop flipping points of view. It confuses the reader sometimes and makes your point less clear. Sticking with Naruto's point of view would be the most beneficial to your story, since he is the main focus. Or if you just want your readers to be inside the minds of all the characters you could just stick with a third person point of view. Using thought dialogue along the lines of 'Kiba thought to himself, 'blah blah blah..'' and then picking up with the rest of your story; it would make the whole story flow smoother and your transitions would be easier for the readers to understand. Just some food for thought :)

Name: Shabuki (Signed) · Date: 06/08/07 - 06:03 am · For: important notice

Aw, Don't stop the story right before the good part comes! :( Please continue, its a great story!

Name: minidragon33 (Signed) · Date: 26/05/07 - 07:25 pm · For: important notice

It's your story .... but I would love to read more.

Name: Sky_blue (Signed) · Date: 15/05/07 - 06:42 pm · For: important notice

Well, its your story, so you have the call. But I love it. This is my first time reading it and I'm kinda sad that when its just about to get to the REALLY good part, we're left hanging on the cliff.
I would love for you to continue it. If that is what you wish.

Name: Hinagirl326 (Signed) · Date: 22/04/07 - 04:28 am · For: Chapter 3: Enter...Nora!

love it. you are sooooooo funny. you need to update. *laughing*